Poetic Documentary Feedback

We have received our feedback and provisional mark for our Steel Bells poetic piece. Upon first glance I am deeply disappointed in the mark. In some ways I can understand why we have received the mark, but I can't help think we were hard done by.

The following feedback was received during our presentation of the poetic piece -

• Take out the 'gold-fishing' in the piece, meaning take out the shots of people talking when you can't hear them. - we slightly disagree with this because we wanted to portray them showing one another how to perform the dances, and due to the piece being poetic, we thought it wouldn't matter inputting these shots. But we may now change this.

• Use more outdoor footage, it's brighter, richer, more effective.

• Good cinematography, especially outdoors.

• Footwork shots work effectively, perhaps show more

• The shadows create an effective contrast in the piece, perhaps use more?

• Unfortunately some of the indoor footages' quality is not very good